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in the outstretched wingspan of
tuesday night you'll find them:
the foothills slumbering jagged under
sixteen inches of loose sand and
the city hushed and glowing, lines
of porchlights strung together in suburban rows like
beads on a chain

your house was cavernous hollow like a lung
the colors were dim and
jaundiced, a quiet rush of tepid water
bent the silence while thirty years of
smoking hung ownerless
in the air like the cling of a dead moths to a wall

you tell me of a dream that's vague like
clouds in the sky like
clouds in the sink with
your body limp and damp like
hot tea bags and
your face like spilled milk
all of my angles bisected by your limbs you say
you're frightened to  nightmare
of rotary telephones and roadkill and
constellations
of a morning where there isn't any water left
to fish or bathe or drown in
of birds that

hang all over the mazarine sky like
radio waves;
tiny perforations in the
infinity of the skyline.
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Given 2011-09-11
The suggester writes: for exit 165. by ~songsandprimenumbers has a delicate words form streams of imagery that entrance the reader with their startling eloquence. ( Suggested by =angelStained and Featured by `Halatia )
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~FireFaerieTalia Sep 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this is so stunning.
i can almost taste it on my tongue.
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:iconforbiddenobsession:
reminds me of the freeways near my home, how they went into the hills to these houses that were so isolated but from which you could see the whole city...thank you for bringing a tiny piece of my home to me right now <3
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:iconimz97:
Beautiful!
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:iconadskelon:
Amazing poem and vivid imagery. Very nice work! :)
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!KikSter11XxKikixX Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
To me, 'exit 165' was all about an escape from reality. You mentioned dreams, and an unmistakable beauty. :love: You really opened up a lot of eyes, if not mine already. :heart:
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:iconrugburnz2:
This is a relatively nice mental meandering but, seems as though it has no real point beyond a lesson in how to stay below the radar of consciousness and, forever live in poetic obscurity. Well done.
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:iconthemutantduckspotato:
... wow thats amazing.
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:iconangel-in-pieces:
~angel-in-pieces Sep 11, 2011  Student Writer
Beautiful poem. The imagery is striking and haunting, and coupled with the flow, it creates a really effective atmosphere.
Congrats on the DD! It's well deserved. (:
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:iconlit-twitter:
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. :)
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